I’ve got no complaints on the story line by itself. I really do like the concept of this story. Indian hot sex Seriously the only reason it’s gettin’ such low rating marks, is it’s so totally screwed up grammar wise.anonymous readerReport 2011-11-15 10:05:28Your writing sucks. Find someone you trust to help you with how to lay out your paragraphs, and the prospective view of ”him, her, their, ours, we, etc. I’ve got no complaints on the story line by itself. I’d really hate to see this story end before it had a chance to be a really good story. I really do like the concept of this story. Seriously the only reason it’s gettin’ such low rating marks, is it’s so totally screwed up grammar wise.anonymous readerReport 2011-11-15 10:05:28Your writing sucks. With help, I hope you finish it. I’d really hate to see this story end before it had a chance to be a really good story. IF only there was a way to get in touch with you and have you send me the story, let me make corrections, then send it back to you.
