21 comments«12345»anonymous readerReport 2013-01-14 14:12:35way to rushed and dumb slow down and build some plot and devlope your characters. delete this series and rewrite it adding the needed background and slowing down the action. Indian Sex names an story match a bit lolanonymous readerReport 2012-12-31 15:17:06When is the next part going to be uploaded I can’t wait for the next partanonymous readerReport 2012-12-31 02:12:26Love it can’t wait for the next part«12345» You are murdering it. You are murdering it. This is not an English class. names an story match a bit lolanonymous readerReport 2012-12-31 15:17:06When is the next part going to be uploaded I can’t wait for the next partanonymous readerReport 2012-12-31 02:12:26Love it can’t wait for the next part«12345» 21 comments«12345»anonymous readerReport 2013-01-14 14:12:35way to rushed and dumb slow down and build some plot and devlope your characters. This is not an English class. I like the story but you did ask for any criticism.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-01 13:44:50this is based on tv series revenge? This is not an English class. I like the story but you did ask for any criticism.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-01 13:44:50this is based on tv series revenge? You are murdering it. delete this series and rewrite it adding the needed background and slowing down the action. delete this series and rewrite it adding the needed background and
