910«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones. you don’t have very many mistakes at all! Indian hot sex i really liked it and usually i can’t stand these kind of stories. Grammar is still shit. ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! too many grammar mistakes for my taste. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones. ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay… Grammar is still shit. I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? 910«12» you don’t have very many mistakes at all! Grammar is still shit. Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay…
