“Female, 23, brn hair, grn eyes, 5’4” 125 lbs, 34C. Indian porn sex try getting claire and katie in the story if u wanna describe it as incest …READERReport 2005-11-01 16:19:01u need to bring the daughter in, and archaic’s right, too choppy, it dosen’t flowREADERReport 2005-10-23 12:28:21It was kind of choppy and hard to follow. He is married to a woman old enough to have an 18 yo daughter, but he slacks around the house like a 20 yo stoner. For all the build up, the sex scene(s?) was kind of anticlimactic. Your suggestions are lame. With a bit of polishing it could pass as reasonably good.«12» With a bit of polishing it could pass as reasonably good.«12» The story does have potential though, keep writing.READERReport 2005-10-23 08:43:03Actually, Silver Hair, his step-daughter Katie had C-cups, and the friend, Kelly, had D-cups, and the author made reference to them being the same size as his WIFE Clair who has D-cups …maybe you should take some notes moron.READERReport 2005-10-23 08:30:22Titman Al write your own stories.
