Thanx everyone for your imput…part 2 is comn soon!«12» please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer. Indian hot sex Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer. please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… im really looking forward to the sequelREADERReport 2006-06-10 00:11:26it was good, but be a little more descripive and dont use @ and it needs to be a tad bit longer cause when you are sharing a sexual story with people im sure you want them to get some pleasure but this was too short for me to cum to but it is still really good, story wise at least 7.5/10READERReport 2006-06-09 14:23:04well the reason I didnt write it from one point of view is because “erich” told me everything later and i wanted to tell both sides of the story.
